Torchwood Haiku-fic - TARDIS/Jack/Hub

[order_of_chaos]

Haiku-fic – TARDIS/Jack/Hub
Author: order_of_chaos
Rating: PG-13
Spoilers: Slight spoilers for End of Days

***

Hub flirts with TARDIS
TARDIS flirts back – they decide

To share Captain Jack.

Jack in the TARDIS
Moving, stroking, touching her
Buttons.  She pulses –

Fades out.  In again.
Lift rising, hand bubbling,
The hub surrounds her.

Rattle of weevil,
Cold brush of underground air
Torchwood sounds touch on –

The wood and blue paint
Of her call box disguise.  Not
Deceived, but liking.

Jack slides out of her
Hand trailing over her side
His feet, twin pressures

Firm on the hub floor.
This connection – Jack in hub,
Jack touching TARDIS

Hub around TARDIS,
And TARDIS touching Jack – each
Claiming the others.

For Jack it is sex;
For the TARDIS, possession
For the hub, power.

For all three, it’s love –
They choose to make it so, so
So, for them, it is

***

The hub connects to
One end of the rift.  Why so
Surprised it can think?

She is; was; will be
Inheritor of space and
Time – the last TARDIS

Jack will never die –
His lovers will not let him,
Selfish constructs, both.

Comments

[fajrdrako.livejournal.com]

This is wonderful. I am in awe. Perfect!

[order_of_chaos]

*feels smug* Yay!

[johnnypurple.livejournal.com]

ooh, i like this. very nice. i liked how the Doctor doesn't feature - even though the Doctor and the TARDIS are so very linked normally (ie. the Doctor is probably there, inside the Tardis, but in this, that doesn't matter to Jack, that's not what's important).

I'm not sure sex/possession/power equal love, I think there is a bit more mutual respect there than that. But I like how you show the Hub's perception of the Tardis. I also like the line: Torchwood sounds touch on –

Well done!

[ryttu3k.livejournal.com]

o.o You wrote Hub/Jack/TARDIS. You wrote Hub/Jack/TARDIS and it WORKED. Wow! *applause*

[order_of_chaos]

Thank's! I noticed the Doctor thing later, in a "I wrote TARDIS-fic without the Doctor? What? How?" kind of way. Because he wasn't the point. Voyeur, though - will mention that if this thing ever forces me to write a sequel :P

Hadn't thought of it as implying a lack of mutual respect (just that they're all scarily screwed up) but it'll be an interesting thing to ponder.
One Earth landmark and underground lair, possessor of many levels and collecter of alien artifacts and dead people. Natural paranoia made worse due to brainwashing by Suzie.
One telepathic time machine, last of her kind and superior to practically any similar technology that has/does/will exist. At least close to omnescient. Bigger on the inside.
One immortal ex (or ex-ex) conman whose character I refuse to go into because it would take forever, who spends his days in the hub waiting for the TARDIS. Also bigger on the inside.
I think they would respect each other. And love each other. Right now I'm trying to work out if they'd admit it.

Thanks again! Your comment made me think - I like that :-D

[subtly-modded.livejournal.com]

wow. i'm...a little speechless.

this is so great.

[johnnypurple.livejournal.com]

My pleasure! Any time! ... Actually, it's from my days of doing creative writing at uni and giving feedback - being constructive, etc. Hard habit to break - but maybe a good habit to keep.

I actually think that the rest of the poem *does* imply respect between the three of them, but the 3 lines about sex/possession/power simplifies it a bit. Because even though those three factors may be part of it, it's not *just* that - there's more going on.

Anywho, glad I could help/make you think, etc. ;-) keep it up!

[order_of_chaos]

Heh heh. *evil laughter*
Thank you!

[order_of_chaos]

*grin* Thanks!

[tiggothy.livejournal.com]

*is utterly in love with this*

[aeshna_uk]

Oh, that is quite brilliant - I love it! I never have the patience for one haiku, never mind stringing so many together to form a story, so I'm bloody impressed by this! :D

[gestalt1.livejournal.com]

You rock. This is awesome! Haiku!powerrrrrrrrrr!!

[order_of_chaos]

Zap! Thank you!

[adafrog.livejournal.com]

hee!! I love Sentient rooms. (I think that's one reason I like Atlantis so much)
awesome.

[order_of_chaos]

Altantis would love the TARDIS. She'd turn on all her lights and play little pieces of music at random times, and the TARDIS would hum back at her and remotely recharge the ZPM. The Doctor would get himself arrested while trying to explain that they were really only there to pick up a few spare parts, nothing to do with the Wraith, or the Genii or the funny little things with tentacles... and released into the custody of Colonel Sheppard when he started going into graphic detail about city/TARDIS cybersex.

[fred-god-of.livejournal.com]

You made the Tardis have sex with the hub, in haiku. I am made of so much awe at the moment it's phsically impossible to describe. What's even worse/better is that it was actually sexy. Just wow.

[fred-god-of.livejournal.com]

you could write that you know?

[kayliemalinza.livejournal.com]

My favorite one is this:

The hub connects to
One end of the rift. Why so
Surprised it can think?


Other than that, complete awe and adoration. I like how it's a good relationship. One question, though-- Did Jack dump the Doctor in an alley somewhere and steal the TARDIS? Is the Doctor on a TARDIS-less adventure? What happens when Ianto comes in too early one morning? When the Doctor comes back, does the TARDIS refuse to leave?

Doctor: What? What's the problem? All the buttons and flashy lights say all systems go, but she won't leave!
Jack: Oh, uh, probably um, you know, weird things happen around the rift....
Doctor: .... oh, do they.
Jack: (coughs slightly) Yes. Do you want me to run some diagnostics? The hub has lots of sophisticated scans--
Doctor: What was that? What did my TARDIS just do? Earthquake?
Jack: Shiver of anticipation, probably.
Doctor: (narrows eyes)
Jack: (grins unrepentantly)

[order_of_chaos]

Ianto has lured the Doctor from the hub with his demonic, tea-making wiles. They'd have been back hours ago if they hadn't been distracted by a random alien invasion and had to stop to find an antidote for the sex-pollen.

Jack: Shiver of anticipation, probably.
Doctor: (narrows eyes)
Jack: (grins unrepentantly)

*laughs* Oh, that is so them!